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Goldilocks and the Three Brothers | Started by: Maria on Jun 15, '14 21:34 |
Maria had a little down time from her work for Godfather Mako. She'd been on a business trip most of the morning, out in Los Angeles. It was an inconvenient trip, and Maria much preferred to be home in Chicago, but she had received word from an old business associate that the cocaine prices were sky high. One trip out West with a bag full of Chicago's finest and she'd have herself a handsome pay day, with plenty left from the cost of her flights to kick up to the Bossman. A Godfather, after all, cannot have too many shoes. Or something. Whatever it was he wanted the money for, Maria was sure he'd spend it well, anyway. She'd been eager to get back to her beloved Chicago as soon as possible, but alas, it wasn't to be. No flights out of the city were available for several hours after her transaction had been carried out. Not one to squander her money in the bars of the city, and not a fan of heavy meals in the middle of the day, she decided to take a walk in one of the parks in the city, with a sandwich and a diet coke, in an ice cold glass bottle from a nearby deli. Chicken salad, with just a touch of mayonnaise, it was. The sun was high in the sky and the park warm in the Californian heat, and Maria felt her enthusiasm for wandering the park waning. Spotting a bench near a small lake, she headed over, sat down, and set about eating her sandwich. It was while she dug about in her bag for a key to flip the top off the coke bottle that her hand hit the small notebook she liked to carry around for idle moments. A smile on her face, she dug it out. The notebook was a collection of her ideas, experiences... and stories. Not in the same way as her journals were, though. This book was intended for her own child someday. Something to read to him or her as she grew up, something to induct them slowly into this way of life. She turned to the page she'd last written one, and head bowed, began to add to it. When almost twenty minutes had past, she wrote 'The End' with a flourish, and a smile to herself, and flipped back to the beginning to read back her work out loud.
Maria nodded to herself with a smile as she came to the end of her reading. This was the first story she'd written to completion. It might not have been the best, but she had at least challenged herself to do something new, which was something to be proud of, in her eyes. Lighting up a cigarette, she soaked up a little more of the Californian sun before her flight back to Chicago was due. |
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Jono was taking a walk through the park when he noticed an old friend of his sitting on the bench with a smile befitting someone who was feeling a sense of accomplishment. He takes a seat next to her, asks for a light and sparks up his own cigarette.
"What're you so smiley about today?" He asks.
"Oh nothing, i've just finished off a short story I started a while ago." Came the reply.
"Oh, awesome! Can I read it?"
He then began to read what Maria had just wrote, a smile soon spread across his face also. It was a good twist on an otherwise well known story that fits in to our way of life at the same time. Everybody dies, of course.
"Ha! Wonderful. I'll have to remember that and read it to the kids for a bedtime story when they've been testing my patience." |
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Reply by: Jono at Jun 15, '14 21:56 | |
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lronSight had been walking by and sat down when he heard the words 'fomidable bosses of New York at the time.' He sat there listening patiently and listening to the whole story. lronSight notices which notebook she's written it in and then begins to speak, "Quite the wonderful tale, Miss Maria. I'm not certain as to how you could tell this story to a young child or even an older one, but still this is easily one of my favorite stories. You'll be a horrible mother if you actually tell that story to a young child and I can't be more serious when I say at least waiting until the child is somewhat older, but if you do you'll be doing so with a fantastic speaking presence about you." |
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Reply by: lronSight at Jun 15, '14 22:00 | |
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I missed a couple of petty crimes and felonies but after hearing that story I must say hat it was worth it. Had I not heard you say The End I'd still be waiting for more stories from you. Now I have to make up for the time I have lost and earn some monies for my boss. |
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Reply by: bboy at Jun 15, '14 22:09 | |
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Paul had decided to take a stroll in the park; it was a lovely day, and where better to spend it? He stopped for a few moments at the edge of the lake, admiring the view as he lit a cigarette. He spotted his friend and The Loop acquaintance Maria sat on a bench nearby Hi Maria, how's it going? What are you doing out here? She gestures towards her notepad, and Paul reads the story she had written. As he finishes reading, he turns back to Maria. Quite the wordsmith Maria. I always knew you were quite the accomplished speaker but that was a very enjoyable read. I certainly await your next short story; the kids might not appreciate it so much but there is most certainly an audience for further instalments here. |
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Reply by: PaulHeyman at Jun 16, '14 20:38 | |
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Maria grinned widely, lifted by the positive feedback to her story. Thank you all for taking the time to read my work and especially to stick around to comment on it - it gives a writer that little extra push to keep going sometimes and it's sincerely appreciated. lronsight, Paul, you guys may be right - this may not quite be the type of thing I could read to the kids before they go to sleep. Unless my sister asks me to babysit again, I haven't quite forgiven her for the ghost story she told me when I was five, I didn't sleep for a week. However, Jono, if you wish to read it to yours, I'll happily have you a copy sent over! I'm sure I'll be back out here again with my next adaptation for you all, and thank you again for the feedback. |
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Reply by: Maria at Jun 17, '14 02:36 | |
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My dear Maria is great at two things! Telling stories, and well, the other thing will cost you $20 at least. | |
Reply by: Alexander at Jun 17, '14 06:31 | |
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Maria smiles at Alexanders compliment on her storytelling. Thank you, old friend. It means a lot to have you come out and say that. But, I keep telling you, when I paint your toenails for you for $20, it's mates rates! I'd charge anybody else at least $50! |
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Reply by: Maria at Jun 17, '14 08:14 | |
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