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| The Mafia Zone - The Big Switch | Started by: artaniS on Nov 26, '10 23:10 |
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You unlock this door with the key of imagination. Beyond it is another dimension - a dimension of sound, a dimension of sight, a dimension of mind. You're moving into a land of both shadow and substance, of things and ideas. You've just crossed over into the Mafia Zone. Joey: “Damn! I hate when I put my shoes on the wrong feet. It’s so uncomfortable. And, another thing . . . why won’t the Don make me Made yet? He’s so lazy. I do all the work, and he reaps all the reward. So unfair!” “Here lies a dead goomba. Grateful to his boss, but too late. Now he lies in a pool of his own blood. If only he had learned never to interrupt his boss when he’s with his mistress.” |
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SINGERROURKE applauds. This is honestly one of the best stories i have ever heard. I wish it was just a little longer so i could feel bad for Joey Joe Jo Juniour but none the less i love it. Great job friend.
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| Reply by: SINGERROURKE at Nov 26, '10 23:46 | |
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I agree with Singer it was a great story just needed to be a bit longer though other then that I applaud you. |
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| Reply by: Sioux at Nov 27, '10 00:09 | |
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An excellent piece of work friend |
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| Reply by: -stormy- at Nov 27, '10 00:26 | |
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Richard makes an appearance |
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| Reply by: RichardWad at Nov 27, '10 01:10 | |
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Eats a connoli and reads the story |
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| Reply by: Sal at Nov 27, '10 01:27 | |
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Eats a connoli and reads the story |
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| Reply by: Sal at Nov 27, '10 01:27 | |
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That was better the second time, Sal. |
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| Reply by: Glaurung at Nov 27, '10 04:46 | |
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why make the story longer? the story describe many young goombas and gangsters that i have seen in my time here. |
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| Reply by: melien_malroar at Nov 27, '10 05:05 | |
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My comment was not to be taken negative rather it was a compliment. I wouldnt and dont listen to long tales of nothingness. Artani told a great story that was short and sweet that i was just blown away by. If he comes out here and tells more tales from this MAFIA ZONE i surely would be one happy mobster. SINGERROURKE turns to the Man and smiles shaking his hand. It was more than an honor to have heard this story today. I find this better than the papers that come out every time they do. |
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| Reply by: SINGERROURKE at Nov 27, '10 05:36 | |
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I agree, this is a great story, yeah its a bit short, but how many people would'nt have bothered to read it if it was longer? now we know artaniS writes a good story, prehaps the next one will be a bit longer. congratulations |
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| Reply by: anoxia at Nov 27, '10 11:02 | |
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The story definately caught my attention, Great Job! |
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| Reply by: Naztyn8 at Nov 27, '10 12:51 | |
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G-Force appears out of nowhere. (Where exactly is nowhere?) Great story Artanis, my friend. I wasn't sure what to think reading the start but was quickly drawn in to the story. I honestly never saw the end coming and there was a lot of small twists for a story so short. I loved it and would like to hear more like it. Well done. G-Force disappears back to nowhere. |
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| Reply by: G-Force at Nov 28, '10 05:27 | |
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Moydadir nods, "Hmm..That sounds eerily familiar.." |
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| Reply by: Moydadir at Nov 28, '10 05:32 | |
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hmm good storie, i would like to add, dont jump around so quickly "hits, bowties, bang dead" ? needs little more in between kinda made me feel like something was missing. other then that awesome =]
{i love twilight zone and tales from the crypt} |
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| Reply by: DarthYoda at Nov 28, '10 10:56 | |
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