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| Johnny Boy : Part 2 | Started by: gameownage on Sep 08, '08 20:09 |
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ok everyone,this is my seconed installment,plz question honestly. P.S you everyone that saw that accident thread,i was typing in the name and clicked enter,hehe :} PART 2 CHAPTER 1 As johnny walked through the town to the warehouse his "uncle" told him to go at this time,he couldent help thinking what would happen after this night.What would his foster family think? Would he join the mafia or get a bullet in his head? What ever it may be,he felt he needed to know.Half an hour went by and he finally made his way to the warehouse he was told to be.He walked up to the door and knocked three loud times.almost right after knocking a man with a deep voice opened a small slot and asked who it was. PART 2 CHAPTER 2 "Johnny S-" he said being cut off."Enough said" and the door was opend to a large warehouse fillied with atleast 30-40 people,talking,lingering,packing drugs.When johnny walked in they all stopped and looked at him.Johnny felt his heart stop for 2 seconeds,then they all went back to thier business and he was breathing easy again."Johnny my boy!" his uncle said as he came out of an office to Johnnys left."How have you been?" he said to Johnny."I-i've been better.i just had my mafia uncle come to my house and tell me to follow in my fathers blood stained shoes,or atleast thats what im guessing you called me here for." Johnny said with a smirk.With a serious tone his uncle said "Johnny,please come into my office." Johnny followed him and the door slammed shut behind him. After they had sat down and got situated,or atleast as situated as they could get,Johnny's uncle said "Johnny,my name is Sam and for now thats all you need to know.Before your fathers death,i was his consigliere.But after his death,i became the don of the detroit mafia.Now,i can't sugar coat this,and this is really an offer you can't refuse.I want you to be part of the detroit mafia and fufill your fathers legacy. well everyone,you like :}? this is the end of part 2 and the way i see it,ide say about 4 or 5 part will be the bulk of this story.like i said comment honestly and tell me any flaws besides grammer (not the best as you can see) punctuation (still,not the best) or anything that needed imrovment from the first chapter because i am already working on it |
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| Hmmm... I say, its nice to see these things in the streets. Perhaps patching it up a bit, and the next few parts could look real nice. | |
| Reply by: Zish at Sep 08, '08 22:16 | |
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Listens to Game. (not the best as you can see) "All i can say to you mate is that i enjoyed it, And atleast you are having a go. I hope to see more from you my friend." Lights a cigar and walks into the closest 7-11 |
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| Reply by: Marcus at Sep 09, '08 09:10 | |
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| no one read it other wise? ohh well,i'll just make the last the part the next one then | |
| Reply by: gameownage at Sep 11, '08 16:52 | |
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