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| The Mafia | Started by: saw121997 on Nov 09, '08 13:12 |
| This is a story of A certain family called the Coreli Family and a man whose name will be unnamed.This man was facing probllems in his life slowly but surely he started to become more and more disturbed intill one day he finally snapped.When the first murder occured he snuck up on a innocent pearson and stabbed him over and over again with a 8 inch butcher knife then to get rid of him he chopped him up put him into a thrash bag and threw him off the Chicago bridge.Under that bridge at night was where the Coreli family had there meetings as the man killed more and more they started to notice a smell.It finally got so bad that they decided that they coulden't have thier meetings there untill the awful smell was found so they put a couple of there members on the job.One of them finally saw a bag so he opened it and found he disembered body of one of thier own members.Even him at a hardend criminal grimaced at the sight for a minute but then he started to make his move to his partner so he could show him the sight and they could take it to the boss after looking at the bag for a second they took it to the car so they could start the drive back to the HQ.On the way to the HQ there car got stopped by the police.They started to freak out the offercer asked them to get out of the car knowing this would not end well one of the members freaked and threw the offercer off of the bridge.Now knowing they were fucked they took there own life by jumping off the bridge.The whole time the man who has remained unnamed has been watching the Coreli family and now knowing that his work to fuck up the world a little bit more he took his own life by slitting his wrist with the same knife he had killed so many other people with.The moral of this story is the menatal impact that being in the mafia can do to people it was the reason the man went on a murder spree and the reason the 2 members killed themselves scary huh. | |
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| need to know what u guys think | |
| Reply by: saw121997 at Nov 09, '08 15:38 | |
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| I found this story very interesting and compelling but I think it should have been longer and more detailed because the base of the story was done up very well good job though | |
| Reply by: Gardipee at Nov 09, '08 16:21 | |
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| who was it? | |
| Reply by: ireland_321 at Nov 09, '08 16:22 | |
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| it's whoever you consume it to be | |
| Reply by: saw121997 at Nov 09, '08 16:25 | |
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| sorry assume | |
| Reply by: saw121997 at Nov 09, '08 16:25 | |
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| Yeah but who did yuo assume it to be when you wrote it? | |
| Reply by: ireland_321 at Nov 09, '08 16:32 | |
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| really didn't think about it | |
| Reply by: saw121997 at Nov 09, '08 16:42 | |
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| Ok then Stillgreat story | |
| Reply by: ireland_321 at Nov 09, '08 16:43 | |
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| Don't really understand it...But anyways good job. | |
| Reply by: Burning_Pistol at Nov 09, '08 17:23 | |
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| I don't get it. Why did the guy kill himself? Surely he could not have felt remorse. | |
| Reply by: Al-Qaatil at Nov 09, '08 20:34 | |
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| no he was just fucked up | |
| Reply by: saw121997 at Nov 09, '08 20:35 | |
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| lets do some rp stratch ending | |
| Reply by: saw121997 at Nov 09, '08 20:56 | |
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| Wicked story. | |
| Reply by: Zoey at Nov 09, '08 22:19 | |
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AHAHAHHAH The Corelli's would never go to the police. ALL LIES! |
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| Reply by: Heaven at Nov 09, '08 22:31 | |
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| they didn't go to the cops | |
| Reply by: saw121997 at Nov 09, '08 22:46 | |
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