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| War (Story) | Started by: Raptor on Mar 13, '09 10:52 |
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This is my first thing that I have written and posted here.(I have written many stories) I'll add chapters here as they come ready, hopefully you'll like it, if you have any request or comments please mail them to me and I'll answer and request I'll try to make something out of them. Do not post them here, thank-you. War Chapter One "Good Morning, USA. Today our topics are 54 dead in the mob war." Turns of the tv. Got enough of it at the first look. This is the third day in New York mafia war. The war started because Mutton tried to control New York area cocaine distribution, but the other families, Ferrier and Romeo didn't like the idea, so here we are, in shit. New York police have no idea what hit them, but they don't mind namely only Mob men have been killed so far. Of course FBI has but their nose in, but they don't have enough resources to stop the war. Mutton is a nice man young but nice. He is slightly stupid namely who would start a war for cocaine and against two families, he no one else! He has about twenty bodyguards all time around him. A little bit of over protection. He is shit rich, technically he is almost as rich as god, but he wants more money. He has a crew of 229 men and is the biggest in New York and loads of drug dealers. He has a big car but it changes everyday because after one day it is a piece of shit, so many people hate this hot shot. There is a second young hot shot, called Romeo, he has the charm and almost a normal size brain. He was a high rank Mafioso Ferrier's crew then Ferrier decided that he shall walk on the street as a leader. He has the smallest crew around here 132 members and as well loads of drug dealers. He has a heroin supplier what ships the heroin very cheap and almost none of the shipments have been captured, so he makes most of his profits by selling heroin, but he really hates Mutton. This was a good excuse to declare war. He really wants to beat the crap out of Mutton. The third is Ferrier, one of the most respectful Mafioso of all time. He is old and he is God! He is smart and doesn't't want war, but since Romeo declared war and he doesn't't want Mutton to have the cocaine market all alone he came with. His experienced crew of 149 men, mainly hit men, he has a big army, because they are specialized in political wacking and that's why he dominates the city, everyone is afraid of his wackers. He has only five bodyguards because he trust them and they are the best in the business. I am lucky in gambling but when it comes to war, I better move to London, to save. Now I am getting ready for I nice raiding trip, someone tipped our leader Mutton, where Romeo would get his next heroin load and we are going to steel it, shit! I am only charge of casinos in New York and know I have to learn to fire a pistol. I got a five minute lesson. 1. Make sure the gun is loaded 2. Make sure that you can see the target. 3. Bang! That will be shit useful. Okay, no have to put my tie in good shape and leave. |
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| Very nice :) | |
| Reply by: Juice_V at Mar 13, '09 11:14 | |
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| That is a very good story keep up the good work. | |
| Reply by: daloscc at Mar 14, '09 20:46 | |
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| GOod read, are you going to add to in now? | |
| Reply by: FridgeRevenge at Mar 14, '09 22:53 | |
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Chapter Two I have to get to the hq, where we will leave, but first I am going to visit on of my casinos. I am in charge of all casinos in New York owned by Mutton, but he gave me two casinos what I own and I get the profit. The other one of my casino has been robbed twice in the past three days, so I am going to check the situation there. I get in to my car, it is a bran new car a Cadillac 452A Roadster, it is blue and it cost a fortune. While driving to my casino, I see tens of police vehicles patrolling the street, since my Roadster very fast, today I have to drive slowly, namely I have a funny feeling that the police will catch every Mafioso that is breaking the law. I arrive at my casino at 7am. I have still two hours to get to the hq, I have no rush. There is a flower shop and from the back door of that shop we get to my casino. There are five blackjack tables on the left hand side, they are in a row. In the middle is one roulette table. On the right is six poker tables, this is a small place and doesn't make as much money that the big ones do. On the left and side, right at the rear is the cash desk, for security reasons and no one has looted it successfully, but the two mugs where only when the money was transported out to the from the casino. The loots weren't big only about a thousand, namely in one money back is only one grand and if one is mugged the transportation will be stopped. My casino will open at 18.00, money transportations will take place at 7.30am today, and I am going to supervise it. Transportation happens with four cars, every minute one moneybag will be transported to a car, last night we made a profit of $8430, a very small sum. Weekends we can make up to $20,000. The bank is 1,2 miles away and the route to the bank is super safe. I can keep 10k to myself per day of the profit every else goes in taxes to Mutton, it is a good deal. I have doubled the amount of guards, now I have 12 guards here and ten of them work at once, the cost comes to $6000 a week. First bag comes out, I don't think that anyone will try today. Car leaves with the bag. Second comes out, no problem. Car leaves as planned. Third comes, I see three men looking at this site, I am keeping my eye on them and I have my hand on my gun, ready to pull, but this one goes well. Fourth comes out, at the same time the first car comes back, fourth car leaves. Fifth back comes and it goes to the first car, second car comes back and gets ready to get the bag, but the three men come this way they pull there guns and the money bag is dropped on the street, there is five of us, two carriers, two drivers and me. They fire at us we take cover and shoot back, one of them runs to snatch the back, but one of my guards gets a hit and wounds him in the shoulder, they have pistols, but one of them pulls a Thompson, shit! Before he manages to shoot at us, the third car comes from behind and knocks him down and the other man. We sprint from our position and go on top of them and I give the order to shoot them dead. They were experienced, but because I doubled the amount of guards, this worked out the best way. We put the bodies in my car, because I'll take them to Mutton. He'll know what to do with them and maybe figure out who they were. We transport the rest of the money to the bank and I get going at 8.15 towards the hq. I should make there in time. |
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| Reply by: Raptor at Mar 15, '09 10:15 | |
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| Great read, I hope to read more from you soon. | |
| Reply by: FridgeRevenge at Mar 15, '09 11:14 | |
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| It reminds me of an old book artist...Angel...The man from the past...But great job Raptor...I felt sudden to read on every paragraph.. | |
| Reply by: GeorgeRourke at Mar 15, '09 13:11 | |
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Chapter Three I arrive at Mutton's hq at 8.46am. I counted the time what would it take to get to the hq wrong. I go inside of a mansion I leave my car outside, normally I would in, but I have three dead bodies in the trunk. I find Mutton's RHM Daniels, he is an old man, his wisdom and experience is crucial to Mutton. "Hello, sir. I have a problem." "You are early, almost fifteen minutes, what is your problem." I get an answer from Daniels. "I have three dead bodies in my trunk and I am almost out of bullets." Daniels is speechless for awhile then he says: "Where are the bodies and in what trunk?" "Sir, they are in my car trunk and my car is on the street. I didn't dare to drive it in." "Go and get your car in and we'll have a look, I'll fetch Mutton here." "Yes, sir." I go to my car and drive it in from the gates, I drive it in front of the door. Mutton and Daniels are waiting, there are also seven other men who I don't recognize and they aren't Mutton bodyguards. I stop the car and open the trunk. "Good day, sir. How are you?" "Hello, Sam. Before I ask what happened I'll introduce you to these seven men, they will help you to snatch the drug shipment. All of these men are from my special hit squad, in normal circumstances the hit squad leader would lead these men, but he is doing other businesses, so I chose a man that I can trust to lead them, you. Here is Figaro." "Hello, sir." Says Figaro, he is a big about 6,5ft man. He has suit on like all of the men, he is young like all of the men, I would say everyone is about 30 years old. He has brown hair. "Here is Johnson" "Good day, sir." Australian accent, he is a smaller man than Figaro, but still big. "Here is Giuliani" "Good day, sir" Now we get some Italian blood, small man, only about 5,5ft. "This is Maurizio." "Morning, sir." Another Italian. Average size about 5,7ft. "He is Damian." "Nice to meet you, sir." American, also average size. "This one is Salvatore." "Hello, sir." Big one, actually I think he might be 40 years old, seems older than the rest. "Silvio, is this one." "Morning." Italian again, have to say many Italian here. "Last but not least, one of my most experienced hitters, Romano." "Hello, sir." Italian big I would say 6,2ft. "Good day, everyone. Nice to meet you." "Let's get the bodies inside, now." Mutton orders. Figaro, Silvio and Johnson carry the bodies inside. The bodies are put down in the big open hall, what has marble floor. Mutton looks at the bodies with Daniels. He is quiet and so is everyone else, we are looking at the bodies, then Daniels says few words to Mutton and Mutton stands up and asks me: "What happened?" "I'll make long story short, my casino was robbed two days in a row, I decided to double the amount of guards and I went to supervise to transportation of the money and the robbers struck again but because there was so many of us, we managed to kill them." "Okay, do you know who these are?" "No, no idea." "Did you check there wallets?" "No, I forgot, sir." "Though we don't need no wallet to know who these were. Good job." "Who were they, sir?" "Ferrier's hit squad members you were very lucky on a good day these would have slaughtered you like pigs." My heart jumps to my throat and I go pale as a ghost, I know how close it was. "Since this has taken time, what we don't have you better get going. I'll send more guards to?" "My casino, behind the flower shop." "That one, ok. They might strike to it and destroy it ass revenge so I'll send men to protect it. Go on now!" "Sir, I am almost out of bullets for my pistol." I show Mutton my gun. "You know that this is a revolver not a pistol, Romano will give you a pistol and we have to teach you something about guns." And so we leave, Romano leads the way. "I'll give you a pistol soon and I'll brief you in the car, sir." We go out from the back exit and we get in to two four-door cars I, Romano, Silvio and Figaro get in the first car, the rest go in the second car. Romano goes on the driver's seat and I go next to him. We leave towards, I have no idea where. |
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| Reply by: Raptor at Mar 15, '09 15:48 | |
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| Great read sir i like all them. | |
| Reply by: TinchyStryder at Mar 15, '09 15:57 | |
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Chapter 5 I have my doubts on this, but I guess this will go well. "So, you need a pistol. There, this is a Colt 1911, it is a good pistol and rarely jams. It has a magazine what holds seven bullets, I'll give you three magazines and 35 extra bullets, so use them carefully." We are heading towards a light, it is turning red and Romano hits the gas and speeds trough the light and the car behind us get just and just through as well. "You are only to supervise us and check the quality of the heroin. Since you know this city like your pockets you will lead us in our escape." "Escape?" I am in real trouble. "Yes, most likely back-up will arrive in few minutes when they hear the gun shots." "Isn't it hard to escape when there are eight of us and two cars?" "Not really. We will take heroin and they will go straight towards hq, they won't stay for a long time. They'll help us eliminate the enemy and then they'll leave. When they have left, we'll put the heroin in our car." "Where are we going?" "You'll see soon enough." After going with quite good speed forward, Romano hits the brakes for a change. On the other side of the road is coming a police car. The second car almost hits our rear end, but it stops in time. We continue the trip with slower speeds to avoid a second quick braking. We pull to a gas station on the edge of the city. I think we are going to refuel, but Romano leaves the car and everyone else follows, so I decide to go with. We sit inside the gas station and order drinks, no one has told anything to me, yet. Therefore, I have no clue, what is happening. After half an hour of drinking water and juice, I finally dare to ask from Romano what is going on: "Why are we here?" "You really want to know. Okay come closer." I come closer and Romano whispers in my ear: "The shipment will arrive at noon. It is 10.53. We will surveillance this area for as long as the shipment arrives. Hopefully we will manage to see Romeo's men before anything happens. Ok?" "Yes, I'll sit tight." Two minutes before noon three cars drive to the station and twelve men get out. Two minutes later a lorry pulls in, I load my gun. Romano gives the signal to move and we head out. Here we go. |
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| Reply by: Raptor at Mar 16, '09 13:38 | |
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Chapter 6 I am behind Romano, following closely. On the north end of the gas station is the shop/restaurant. In the middle is two gas pumps for fuelling. On the east side and on the west side are parking spaces, the lorry has parked on the west side. I and Romano continue walking straight towards it. The guards are surrounding the lorry. They have left their cars quite far, so only cover that they have is the lorry. Silvio has gone near of the drivers spot, Figaro and Johnson are coming from my right hand side, from the south end. Giuliani and Maurizio are coming from my left hand side. It would seem that we have them under siege. Damian and Salvatore are missing then I look towards the station and I see them on the roof with rifles. Damian and Salvatore fire first and they kill two enemies, with one shot, the rest of them take cover, but Figaro, Johnson, Giuliani and Maurizio pull Thompsons out, the firing start. I can't do anything I deck to cover near a car. I see Giuliani and Maurizio shot down. Figaro is still standing but Johnson has fallen. I have no idea how they manage to shoot so well. Silvio is doing well with a shotgun He killed the driver and has cleared the left side of the truck. I raise my gun and pull the trigger. Bullet misses by miles, I pull again. Hits the rear en of the lorry. "Romano are we in shit!" I shout "No, we are not. Just keep on firing!" "What the fuck is happening, should we move?" "No, let's wait." Silvio is coming to the rear of the lorry, rear is facing towards me. I see a man coming under the lorry behind Silvio and I shoot at him to save Silvio. I hit Silvio on the leg and he falls down. Romano takes the man behind Silvio out. Now there are only two left from thirteen. They shot Figaro. Only five of us left, but Silvio is injured. Romano hits the other one and Salvatore manages to shoot the second one. "Is it over?" "Yes, let's get the heroin." Salvatore and Damian come to join us in the parking lot. They take Silvio and tie his leg. "Thanks for shooting me, Sam." "Sorry, mate. I missed the guy behind you." Romano shows me to come in the lorry. "Is this pure." I take a taste, wait for a minute. "As pure as it can be, good stuff." Some men walk to us in suits, black one. They pull their pistols and shout: "FBI, freeze!" I panic, pull my pistol and they fire at me with no mercy. "FBI!" What a god damn idiot. Pulling his pistol. I fire three rounds in him. They gun next to him follows his sample. Jackasses this whole group. He gets three rounds as well. Two dead, six shot, not bad. I turn my attention to the three guys on the floor, my partner a rookie named Kevin, is guarding them. "So, do you want to die as well?" I ask them. "No, arrest us, please." I get a surprising answer from them. Wonder why they are not following those example. Though, back-up arrives, a little late, but still. "What took you so long?" "You were suppose to wait for us!" Leader of an armed task force says. "Here you are, few pounds of heroin. Catch you later! Come Kevin, we don't have al day." End of part one. Will continue soon. Please comment about this so far. |
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| Reply by: Raptor at Mar 18, '09 10:15 | |
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Let's go through the numbers: One, Two, Three, Five, Six. Wait a second one number is missing!!!! Four! Sorry got confused with the numbers. It should go: One, Two, Three, Four and Five. Not One, Two, Three, Five, Six. |
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| Reply by: Raptor at Mar 18, '09 10:18 | |
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| They're all very well written | |
| Reply by: Knight_n_Gale at Mar 18, '09 10:24 | |
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| very nice you are a good writer | |
| Reply by: daloscc at Mar 25, '09 15:24 | |
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