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| My Rap-lemme know what u think! | Started by: Colossal on Jun 07, '09 16:38 |
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Tell me what you guys think: another day for a true baller has begun and w/ my swag, I shine brighter than the sun mess with me? your dumb, man im the top gun im not number 3, mumber2, im number 1 this aint for fun... dis da game of life come on man, don't be scared, come and roll da dice get doubles, roll twice; I know it feels nice; but land in the wrong spot, your gonna pay the price i got dese diamonds, lookin so nice makin so much cake, everybody wants a slice she a lil sweet, but she got a lil spice girls love me... like asians love rice all the diamonds...they bigger than rocks when they shine, the girls jump out dey socks if we got beef, then our paths shouldn't cross our fight will be live, and I dont mean XBOX i'll get some punches in, then ill put you in a grapple your bones liek rice krispies, they'll begin to crakcle I AM FRESH like a newly picked apple you'll think of me, when you pop open a snapple im bout to dip, im bout to be gone I got a private jet, I never stay home I got so much money, ya can't leave me alone makin' cash, different languages; call me rosetta stone MDizzleFresh all rights reserved (MDizzleFresh is my rap name) |
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Well I think that some people might find "girls love me... like asians love rice" incredibly offensive. And erm, don't take this the wrong way, but don't quit your day job :) V. |
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| Reply by: Vehellione at Jun 07, '09 16:42 | |
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| It begs the question.... what if his day job is as a rapper? | |
| Reply by: Deimne at Jun 07, '09 16:48 | |
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hahahhaha I agree with them ^^^ It aint bad but you could work on it :) |
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| Reply by: Jonny-Timello at Jun 07, '09 16:50 | |
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Well Deimne, if rapping is his day job, he should quit. I also wonder where he got the impression that all asian people love rice.. :S |
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| Reply by: Vehellione at Jun 07, '09 17:47 | |
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That was the crapest rap I have ever heard!!!!! Only kidding I thought it was great.: |
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| Reply by: Shrink at Jun 07, '09 18:05 | |
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Heh, nice try! Surely it's not the work of a professional but then again I doubt a pro would share his raps on here. One remark though, the 2nd and 3rd second both are ...ice I would try not to use the same end rhyme twice in a row. And perhaps build a story into it, now it's a lot of rhyming, but are you saying something? |
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| Reply by: ScipitaRourke at Jun 07, '09 18:36 | |
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Work on ya skill son. Bring a bigger vocab. Looks like somethin from a southern rapper. Get them skills up and maybe oneday youll be a lyricist. Test your skills on www.rapmusic.com thats where I started about 15yrs ago...Im retired now lol |
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| Reply by: Cav at Jun 07, '09 18:53 | |
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| what are your guys problem? asians love rice! | |
| Reply by: Vlad_III at Jun 07, '09 18:59 | |
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| kk | |
| Reply by: Revski at Jun 07, '09 19:22 | |
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How can that be offensive lol I hear Jeremy Clarkson talk about americans and thier cheeseburgers all the time :( |
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| Reply by: Cav at Jun 07, '09 19:53 | |
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| I thought that the rap was BRILLIANT and lol, cav! | |
| Reply by: cgray12 at Jun 08, '09 03:09 | |
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its ok |
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| Reply by: Joker_Henchman at Sep 02, '09 20:17 | |
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Alright. |
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| Reply by: Angelo-Lombardi at Sep 02, '09 21:55 | |
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Not bad |
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| Reply by: Enormous at Sep 02, '09 22:22 | |
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Nothing special to be honest...you could be abit more creative. It doesnt have any meaning, what is it supposed to be saying? |
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| Reply by: Leoluca_Bagarella at Sep 03, '09 02:54 | |
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Their ok lyrics, but it depends on your flow, can you spit good? |
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| Reply by: killa_k at Sep 03, '09 03:48 | |
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It's just about guns, drugs, girls, and money... I like it. |
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| Reply by: JoeTheGun at Sep 03, '09 08:14 | |
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Its okay but you should definitley just work on it a little more and it will be really good |
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| Reply by: Tony-Castelli at Sep 03, '09 09:15 | |
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in a fight between me and you there will be three hits me hitting you. you hitting the floor. and the ambulance hitting 80 |
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| Reply by: mikado at Sep 03, '09 10:58 | |
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