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| A Short Story (A Deal Gone Wrong) | Started by: Hellboy on Jul 25, '09 19:13 |
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I was walking down the strrets of LA waiting for a big load of drugs. Word on the street from FBN Agent Joe Melizzano was that Cocaine was at a all time low. My supplyer was a known boss. He was also known for getting drunk and blabbing to the police. As I walked down a back alley were my boss was supposed to be. I could already smell whiskey of him so I tried to get the drugs as quick as possible. He walked me to his van and the rain had just started. I had took my 10lbs and tried to get out quick. Then in the disstance I could here poilice cars approching. I dumpedmy 10lbs in a dumpster and wheeled it down around a corner no were else to go myself I jumped in with my drugs. I could here the boss blabbing everything to the poilice I only prayed he didnt know where I was I Waited in that dumpster for 24 hours my CL thought I was dead I found the nearest pay phone and wrong him. I told him what happend and he laughed. I said I was taking the next flight out of here. Before Flying out I bought a suit and got something to eat. I took my drugs and flew home to Detroit. When I arrivedI heard word that the Boss was dead. Caught snitching to the poilice. My CL told me if I done that the same thing would happen. |
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| Reply by: CaptainCrunch at Jul 25, '09 19:19 | |
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Sorry about the spelling, I normally put a spell check on before I post them. |
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| Reply by: Hellboy at Jul 25, '09 19:28 | |
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Marley smiles as he exhales smoke You did the right thing by hiding out in the dumpster. You did the wrong thing by doing business with a known rat. Just a part of learning our way of life. I enjoyed the story though. I thought those pigs would have sally ported you, but you thought fast and saved you azz. Looks over at CaptainCrunch and thinks, "Spellingbee.com" Must be some new Spelling class he want's people to .com and participant in. I tell you, damn educated people trying to take over the underworld. |
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| Reply by: JamaicanMob_Marley at Jul 25, '09 19:51 | |
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Thank you Mob_Marley for your complements and advice I appreciate it and I'm glad you liked it. |
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| Reply by: Hellboy at Jul 25, '09 19:56 | |
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wow i thought it was pretty good as well... your boss got wat he deserved tho i suppose nothing will get u killed faster then babbling off to the pigs while your drunk |
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| Reply by: Taken at Jul 26, '09 01:23 | |
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Thanks Taken |
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| Reply by: Hellboy at Jul 26, '09 07:50 | |
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pretty good story man, you need a drink after all that hiding |
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| Reply by: Afro99 at Jul 26, '09 08:34 | |
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I did, Look out for the next short story coming soon. |
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| Reply by: Hellboy at Jul 26, '09 08:36 | |
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It's horrible that someone would do that to another family member no matter what family you belong to. Glad things worked out for you. |
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| Reply by: Myrddin at Jul 28, '09 08:58 | |
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Extremely insulting coming from a nobody Capo to a Made Man in Godfather's family. I'll make sure Death-Knight sees this personally. |
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| Reply by: Rourke at Aug 06, '09 13:32 | |
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Afew mistakes still a good story. Keep it up! :D |
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| Reply by: JoeTheGun at Aug 06, '09 19:36 | |
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Thank you Joe |
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| Reply by: Hellboy at Aug 06, '09 20:27 | |
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I like this short and sweet. You know you maybe starting a trend here. Wont surprise to see more short ones. |
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| Reply by: Jackson-Jax-Teller at Aug 07, '09 04:31 | |
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Thanks Jackson, I make one every week, heres last weeks. |
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| Reply by: Hellboy at Aug 07, '09 09:06 | |
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I'll agree with my esteemed colleague Rourke, the behavior exhibited by Captain Crunch would certainly not fly in New York. Wish I had seen this sooner. Hellboy, you're Made, you don't have to be cordial to people that wish to take digs at you. |
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| Reply by: ThomasRourke at Aug 08, '09 01:21 | |
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I'd like to go to one of Captain Crunch's speeches and criticize how he speaks, but for some reason i can't recall him ever giving one. SO i appauld hellboy on coming to the public view to tell us his story, i guess some people just don't have what it takes to give speeches, ie: Captain Crunch. Me being a man who had trouble with street speeches before,where were you to criticize me Captain Crunch? Great speech hellboy i greatly enjoyed it, even though some people have no idea how to show respect to a made fucking guy in a Godfather's family none the less. I know for damn sure that shit wouldn't fly in LA. |
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| Reply by: Premier at Aug 08, '09 01:31 | |
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I think that the only flying of that attitude would be the body into a lake. This is why new and young mafiosi are so afraid to come to the streets and tell tales of their adventures. Everyone is so quick to jump their shit about it. CaptainCrunch my father use to say that you could say anything as long as you said it in away acceptable to the public and in a respectful matter. I think that you should think about that before posting such non sense. Hellboy, excellent job. You've shown that you're not afraid to come out here and I enjoy seeing new blood bringing their words out. I hope you can build onto this maybe or even tell some more tales. |
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| Reply by: Asylum at Aug 08, '09 01:49 | |
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Thank you Thomas and Premier and I have never saw one of Captain Crunch's speeches either Premier. I would like to see Captain Crunch defending himself but he is no were to be seen. Thank you Asylum I've got another story in the streets just look at the link. |
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| Reply by: Hellboy at Aug 08, '09 12:10 | |
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