It was a cool breezy morning when Toni-Vercete arrived in Los Angeles, as he was walking to his new apartment he had ordered over the phone for his arrival. As he was heading for the apratment a woman appraoched him, she tapped him on the shoulder as he was lighting his cigar, "Gotta light?" she asked. Toni held his lighter up and light her ciggarette. She took a drag and asked "You looking for a family?" Toni thought about this, his father had been in this business but wanted out, now its his turn, "Yeah, you gotta position?" she took a drag and handed him a piece of paper it read:

The Walking Dead .... thats it, nothing else but it did have directions on the back.... Directions that led to a HQ.

He went to the HQ and was introduced to the upper stucture of the family. Straight away, he had a chance to prove himslf. A family drug dealer had been leaving his post and not making money. Toni was sent to take him to work.

Toni got in his car and arrived at the dealers house. He nocked on the door and waited, after a while he knocked again.He wondered what was wrong so he walked in to find blood all over the place. Suddenly there was a bang in the bathroom. Toni pulled out his 45. and went for a look. He entered the bathroom and found the dealer laying there...dead. Toni left the bathroom and found a card on the kitchen table. It was a calling card from a hitter. Toni went back to the familys HQ and told Gaius the news. Gaius was so furious that he blamed Toni. Gaius calmed down and gave Toni his second job. Find and kill that hitter.........

To be continued...........

well written man.... i will be awaiting more

Nice! Ready to read more.

What in particular did you guys enjoy about this?

~T~

Not the greatest story ever but i appreciate the fact you put the effort in to come out here and share it with us. With experience you could become a good story teller.

One thing that I really liked about this story (Tallien, you weren't asking me, but I guess I'll answer it anyway) is that it leaves off loaded with the plot for part 2.  Too many stories seems to totally resolve themselves and then say "to be continued."  This one gives you the next objective.

But advice for you, Toni.  More detail.

not bad  :)