A TERRIBLE CAR CRASH ON THE ROAD

On Thursday, October 16, 1931. There was a terrible car crash on the express way. It all started by one man name Chad Johnson who was being pressured by two friends named Thomas and Ricky who wanted him to go out an have some drinks. So he gave in, and went to have some drinks at this warehouse on 18th street. Which was a front that sold moonshine. When he got there one drink turned into fifteen. He felt he was getting so drunk he decided to go home. One of his friends that was not so drunk asked if he wanted a ride home. But he said he was fine. He left the warehouse to be on his way not expecting anything to go wrong. While Chad was walking out the front door Ricky knew he was drunk. But anyways like I was saying. Chad went in his automobile and began to drive. Since he knew he was so drunk he was going to take the side street, but he wanted to get home fast so he took the expressway instead. So he hopped on I80 doing the speed limit of 90 miles per hour. He though that since it was late at night there wouldn't be many people driving on the road, so he started to go faster. He doesn't realize that it was a car coming from the shoulder of the road, so before he could slam on his brakes he ran straight into the car. So when he hit the car it started spinning and it flipped over. He immediately pulled out his cell phone and called the ambulance. Ten minutes later the ambulance come and started to remove the door, he got out to see if they were ok. As he got closer to the car he realizes that the person he hit was his mother. He broke out in tears hoping and praying she was ok. The paramedics asked if he knew the person who was in the car. Chad said yes, so the men asked what relationships they had and Chad said it was his mother. So the paramedics asked him to ride with her to the hospital to see if she was ok and so he could get checked out. When he got to the hospital the doctor told him his neck was sprung and he can took pain reliever. And he would be fine but his mother was died. He couldn't believe what he heard, he don't plan for his mother to die this way. He couldn't believe he killed his own mother.

Great story the blob.

yes i agree

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Nice Read Blob. If only we could get it in hardcover.

First, this should not be in the streets. Shouldn't you be off robbing liquor stores or something?

Second, you should consider paragraphs. Breaking things into smaller sections is much easier on the eyes- and helps anything read better.

Third, did you seriously just randomly come out into the streets, tell a story, compliment yourself on your story, and then agree with your own compliment? Are you schizophrenic, stupid, or both?

Shakes her head and rubs her temples.

Johnny walks up to theblob and pokes him in the chest.

You need to slow down and think before you step into these streets and run your mouth with wild stories. And don't go around talking to yourself. For god's sake man have some respect.

Johnny pushes theblob backward.

Now go do some petties and make yourself useful.

Johnny lights a smoke and walks away shaking his head.

I totally agree with Don Kates and Mr.Kraven...

agree with Don Kates and Mr.Kraven..

A- There were no cell phone's in the 30's

B- Would love to put some more emphasis on paragraphs.

C- I first saw this didn't even bother to read it but i beared thru it,

enough said.

Along to go with Recro's list,

D. Cars didn't go 90 MPH in the 30's...Correct me if I'm wrong.

good story

Anybody who thinks this story is good needs to go read some of my story's,or if you're looking for even better story's,Don Kates has em!

I believe the kid has had enough constructive criticism, twice over along one point, as any more would just be redundant.

As for you Tommy_Gato, I don't see the reason you need to advertise yourself in such a manner.

I was simply letting everybody know,that if they though this story was good,that Don Kates' were amazing.

^^ I dont understand

respect is one thing to lick ones ass is another