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Philadelphian butcher Started by: Auset on Oct 14, '09 05:16

What ever was given is now taken away, and what ever was hidden is now out in the open.

As I ran down the street, my revolver in my right hand and her picture in the other, hoping to get there just in time ...

I was at my house when I heard a strange noise outside, I looked out the window and saw a men arguing with my bodyguards.
When I gave the order, he was escorted up.

Are you the man called Auset?

Yes I am

Then you have 5 hours left. (5:15)PM

At first I thought this was some kind of joke, so my first respond was my gun, pointed at his left eye.

Who the hell do you think you are?

I am just a messenger.

I can see it in his eyes, he knows nothing! The only thing we got off him before he was wacked was an address. That address leads to Samacom the drug dealer I do business with, but it seems that he couldn't wait for the deadline and needs his cash. I knew I was in trouble, I don't have that cash on me, I was supposed to get it on a drug deal, but that's till tomorrow! (8:00)PM

There was nothing else I could do but to get to him before time runs out. I take my gun and walk out the door. It took me a little less than an hr to get there.
As I walk towards the gate I spot my fiancé standing on the roof, tied up with her hands behind her back and there seemed to be a rope rapped around her neck.(9:15)PM

I felt so cold as we shot our way threw the 30+ guards at the gate and ran towards the front door. An old man surprises me when I opened the door, he looked right into my eyes and said:

You still have 1 hr

At that moment I heard a car speed out from the back on to the streets. I turned around and spotted jenny in the back seat.

I had no choice but to follow the car!

We ran to the car but the tires were flat and we had no time to fix them, I knew that if I don't get to her in time it will be too late.

As I ran down the street, my revolver in my right hand and her picture in the other, hoping to get there just in time, I came across an old shop that use to be the town bakery, with blood traces coming from under the front door. I opened the door and followed the trace to a backroom.

I opened the door and there she was, lying on the floor covered with blood... I was too late.

Anger, hatred filled my heart, as I held her in my hands tears began to drop.

It didn't take me 30 minutes to get to my house. I got every single weapon I could carry, called in my 5 bodyguards and went to the villa.

The cops are still counting the bullets that were taken from Samacom's body, I shot him, stabbed him, hell I even burned his ass.

The emptiness has filled me, I see no remorse nor regret... Revenge was sweet.

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When you lose something so precious you will have a problem letting go.

Yet knowing what has happened, how it happened, where it happened, and why it happened just makes you one step closer to insanity.

As I walked into the chapel, looking at every one there gave me this chill up my spine, I sat at the back seat, my head down, my hands shaking, I wondered what would have happened if I was 5 minutes early, could I have saved her life?

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It's a really good story and that's a good line to close on. Please keep writing

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Wraith walked by the street of the drug dealer he once used to trade with in Philadelphia. The guy had been a real scumbag. If it hadn't been for the sake of his family's reputation, the guy would have been counting fishes a long time ago.

"Well, fate is certainly ironic," I grinned as I heard gunshots from inside the den. Glancing quickly at a window, I saw the dealer's body being covered with bulles. "Good for him," I muttered, congratulating the person who had done it silently before walking away, whistling.

Note: Good storyline.

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Bang_Bang hearing this feels saddened

may her soul Rest in Peace at least you were able to get some revenge

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Mario.claps.very nicly done. great stoy line.good but sad. i hate the woman got killed.time to make them bastards pay.and i hope u make part two. keep writing.

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This was a very good story,are you writing a second part?Great way you set up the story line...

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the style your story was written is really great..Flashback also impressed me .. keep writing this kinda great ones pls .. respects

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Very good story.

But mariogambino why would you use fullstops 9 times in one sentence ?

Thats just retarded i think its best if you just dont speak at all.

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Our streets have missed this kind of stories, a great one to be fair, I can't wait to hear more of you sir.
{S}ilvio

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Auset I am very impressed by your story and I look forward to more of your writings. You have brought a breath of fresh air to these streets and that is not an easy feat. I am glad to have you as part of the crew.

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under the moon light, Auset walks down the street and shakes Paul's hand thanking him for those kind words.

and i thank you all for your replies and yes by the end of the week i will have part 2 ready and posted.

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Very good story my friend. I do hope you keep writing.

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Kvothe sips his vodka and then asks, Want a swig.

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Very nice read. I look forward to seeing more hopefully from you in the future.

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I am sorry for your loss Auset.

Told very well though.

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this is a very good starter. BRAVO

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You can't change the past.You belong to the lucky part,you belong to the ones who could revenge their loss,some of us didn't manage it.Now take a deep breathe and try to honour her memory...

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