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| She and He. | Started by: JakeWhite on Nov 09, '09 18:15 |
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Thud Thud Thud. |
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All I can say is WoW... |
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| Reply by: Roxanne at Nov 09, '09 18:19 | |
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I like this story I think its one of the better ones I have seen I just think it was put out at a time where people were a bit to busy with wars and rebuilding for lots of people to comment. |
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| Reply by: Ricob at Nov 09, '09 21:13 | |
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This is really good. its kind of sad but it really is one of the better things i have read. good job friend!! |
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| Reply by: Vegas_Gionni at Nov 10, '09 20:16 | |
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Very good story,I would have to agree with Vegas it was a little sad...but it was one of the best I have read. |
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| Reply by: Marcus_Burnett at Nov 10, '09 23:59 | |
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I really feel sad for the man. And the worst part was he saw his children and wife dead. But he didn't back down. He stayed right be her side aven in passing. I find it romantic. Good job on the details. |
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| Reply by: ballsy_mcdermont at Nov 11, '09 12:21 | |
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A little tear goes down the side of Sally's face |
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| Reply by: Sally_Gorido at Nov 11, '09 12:23 | |
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Incredible. Moving, gripping, thrilling! A readers dream! Not a fault I can think of, apart from one small flaw. I have noticed a few of your elipsis have either one too short or one too many dots! |
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| Reply by: Albert_McGuire at Nov 12, '09 16:54 | |
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Tosses $32 on the table
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| Reply by: Saint_Cav at Nov 12, '09 19:47 | |
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Nice story,enjoyed reading it. |
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| Reply by: Kid_Twist at Nov 12, '09 20:07 | |
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My thanks for all of your kind comments... |
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| Reply by: JakeWhite at Nov 13, '09 15:05 | |
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Jake, this was so sad yet captivating...I could tell that every word was deliberate and full of emotion. Well done! Please write me a book too :D |
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| Reply by: Lieselotte at Nov 15, '09 04:32 | |
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good one |
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| Reply by: Atheist-Deccers at Nov 15, '09 08:01 | |
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