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My First Assassination | Started by: Albert_McGuire on Nov 24, '09 13:07 |
Leaning over the railing, Albert watched his prey leaving the building below him. Without a sound, and with his bowie knife unsheathed, Albert drops from the balcony, his knife aimed for the heart of his unsuspecting target. |
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Very enjoyable, look forward to reading the next instalment. |
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Reply by: don-constable at Nov 24, '09 14:51 | |
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Thanks, I apologise to all about the mistake I woefully made in the penultimate paragraph, I seem to have got ahead of myself and repeated the phrase. |
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Reply by: Albert_McGuire at Nov 24, '09 14:53 | |
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Thank you, I realise looking back it may have been slightly rushed, I shall make sure I take more time with my next one. |
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Reply by: Albert_McGuire at Nov 24, '09 16:41 | |
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It was pretty good. Could have used a little more in the action part. But over all it was good. I look forward to the sequel |
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Reply by: JoeyPizzone at Nov 24, '09 18:48 | |
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You are a very skilled assassin albert. I look forward to listening to more of your amazing stories. |
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Reply by: Abyssor at Nov 25, '09 12:35 | |
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Reply by: jonko at Nov 26, '09 13:54 | |
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Can't wait to hear about your next assasination. |
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Reply by: mnirem at Nov 26, '09 13:55 | |
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Well done Albert old friend....a fine composition of our most enwizened language of old.... twas damn good stuff |
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Reply by: Bullingdon-Speaker at Nov 26, '09 15:11 | |
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Thanks Bullingdon, I apologise once again for my rushed style of writing, I shall make sure to take longer on my next piece. |
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Reply by: Albert_McGuire at Nov 26, '09 15:19 | |
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nice story, you're a pretty good writer. |
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Reply by: Crybaby at Nov 26, '09 15:21 | |
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Great thanks to all of you, you are all very kind! You have inspired me to write again, and I am currently making my next assassination, and I am taking more time over it than this, so it will be longer, but much better! |
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Reply by: Albert_McGuire at Nov 26, '09 15:38 | |
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