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| Bad luck in a Casino | Started by: Chris_Moltisanti on Jan 10, '10 10:30 |
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Chris Moltisanti which is me is a top guy in the Lombardi I was in a spiraling beef with a guy from Biagio Romano's While I was leaving the casino in his car. Three cars swerved Me: Aye, watch my car that is a Rolls Royce and do you know Kidnapper #1: Fuck you we don't care who you are Kidnapper #2: All we want to do is rob you. Too much heat Me: You damn right there is going to be too much heat if you Me: Your going to regret doing Kidnapper #1: Ha ha, you so tuff. (He then hit me the gut Me: I can see you're the hot headed one when I'm killing you He was about to hit me again but Kidnapper#2: (He stopped him) Don't hit him again, let's not They drove me to the casino; they held me at gun point and took When got to the "money room" with the vault people had their Kidnapper #1: Putt down your gun or he dies Kidnapper#2 thank you for your quick responding now put all Two of the kidnappers had about 8 duffle bags and they threw Kidnapper #2: Get to working you got 3 minuets But what they didn't know was I had 5 guys behind a shelf. John: Ever body ready Joe: Yeah lets do it John: Remember they have guns so smack their guns away then John: On three we turn off the lights and bust in their Joe: 1...2...3... go go go They go in there and bust them up. I knew what was happening All the kidnappers were dead except one. We didn't realize Me: I was angry, you tried to rob you fuck and you killed my Me: Go outside and take care of the people in the getaway But it was too late they saw my men coming and drove away Me: Lock up the casino and lets clean this mess up. But John: I have a good Idea of who it is too Me & John: Phil So I took the shot gun and before he could get his gun up Me: That's what happens to rats now let's get this place We cleaned up the place. When Aldo came he was distraught. Me: I'm sorry about what happen, I took care of the rat that Lombardi: I don't care, that's only half of what I want Aldo: I'm sorry too Lombardi: I know them Steve got authorization to start a family. Me: Tell me what to do and I'll take care of it |
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Went you read it can you please post your comment on this thread |
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| Reply by: Chris_Moltisanti at Jan 10, '10 10:41 | |
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Very interesting. Is there a part 2? |
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| Reply by: Mejar-Suchowlinski at Jan 10, '10 22:59 | |
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Yes their will be a part two. When I get made |
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| Reply by: Chris_Moltisanti at Jan 10, '10 23:23 | |
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I enjoyed it as i was reading it i was picturing what was happening,, would love you read the second part.. cant wait very good job.. |
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| Reply by: Micheal93 at Jan 11, '10 05:33 | |
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Chris, I can appreciate the endeavour you have put into creating something to entertain the streets. Good effort. My main advice, if you want it, would be to first run through this by yourself down a back alley somewhere to check that it flows well and sounds exactly as you want. Do it twice, thrice, or more. I'm sure there's more to come from you though. |
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| Reply by: BoabyWanKenobi at Jan 13, '10 15:23 | |
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Thank you Godfather, I will take your advice and put it towards helping my next story |
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| Reply by: Chris_Moltisanti at Jan 16, '10 10:11 | |
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Excellente! I liked the plot, it was like reading a book, but an action book and there's a very cool main character. It was also a good story because it's like a movie running in my head I can picture even every minor details. I would be delighted to read the second one. |
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| Reply by: Wiggles at Jan 16, '10 10:56 | |
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My favorite part is when you shot the guy in the face after he kicked you in the groin...and that it wasn't another bank robbery story. I think if you clean up the formatting a bit you'd get more people reading, though that's just my opinion. Anyway, looking forward to another story from you. |
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| Reply by: Anarchy-Grey at Jan 16, '10 13:26 | |
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Dino Moretti hears Chris Moltisantii telling he tale.Dino Claps loudly.very nicely done. i loved it.and i realy hope there is a part two chris. |
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| Reply by: DinoMoretti at Jan 16, '10 16:32 | |
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