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Mafia Weekly - Issue One | Started by: Coach on Jan 23, '10 10:10 |
Mafia Weekly Major War By Coach On January 17,1932 Godmother of Philadelphia,and Acting Head of Los Philadelphia and Los Angeles began their attack on Vegas,soon Finally,after many long hours,many deaths,the war was over. Detroit lost LilyEvans,and Los Angeles lost Don Morgan. While January 17 - War section By Coach 1.Tony-Sperio 131. Battista Weekly Joke By Coach Whilst it may not be a joke,it is an important lesson,you should never forget. "Remember,when someone annoys you,it takes 42 muscles in your face Authorization section By Coach Following the war,and many deaths,there are happier times,times to rebuild,with that,I give you the authorization section. Don Lucretia_Borgia Don Kates,leader of The Renaissance,got the word from Godfather Crew Leader Cryptic,from New York,has moved to Las Vegas to serve under Godmother Lucretia Borgia. Congratulations! Godmother Lucretia Borgia authed Consigliere Giovanni_Bontade,to Godmother Lucretia Borgia has also authed a loyal member of Godmother Kates is also extending New Orleans,she has authed her Congratulations to Return_of_Ghost and The Revival on your Detroit Auth!! Congratulations to The_Dean and The Lions Den on your New York Auth!! Godfather Paul_Vidi - Dead January 22 Godfather,yes Godfather,of Saint Louis,was killed by Written,published,and edited by Coach. |
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I enjoyed this new paper to our streets, Other than a few printing faults it was respectable. |
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Reply by: ______ at Jan 23, '10 10:46 | |
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I agree with underslashies, apart from the huge spaces between lines and a few other things this could be a briilant paper. Tommy lifts the paper, grabs his coffee and walks off |
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Reply by: Tommy_Carroll at Jan 23, '10 10:52 | |
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A very goos effort & good read. Long may it continue |
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Reply by: Crafty-Cockney at Jan 23, '10 10:54 | |
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Check this out everybody it's the D to tha R to tha E to tha X to tha L, the XL stands for extra-large, people |
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Reply by: Drexl at Jan 23, '10 11:07 | |
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Xanxus cut into his morning pancakes, coated with just the right amount of syrup. He then leaned over to take up a new newspaper. His house keeper had brought it over with the regular ones. He looked at it and found his eyes a little disoriented. Despite that, he did manage to finish it off, and then lifted his fork. "A good effort, but reduce the spacings to make it easy on th eyes." |
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Reply by: -Xanxus- at Jan 23, '10 23:02 | |
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Thanks everyone for the feedback. I apologize about the large spaces,this damned typewriter does it automatically,I'll just have to find a way to fix that. Expect Issue Two to be coming out next weekend. |
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Reply by: Coach at Jan 23, '10 23:33 | |
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Informative paper Coach, enjoyable reading, I look forward to the next issue. |
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Reply by: Erractic at Jan 24, '10 01:43 | |
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Interesting paper i must admit... nicely done, except for the spaces in between. But that is just a small detail. Good work! |
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Reply by: sneakyrat at Jan 24, '10 10:16 | |
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Q_Legacy takes the paper and sits to have a cup of coffee while reading Looks good, keep working on it. I wont comment any further as everyone has made the suggestions that will make this a good read. |
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Reply by: Q_Legacy at Jan 24, '10 11:04 | |
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i like this, very interesting |
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Reply by: RazorBladePietro at Jan 24, '10 14:27 | |
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Good paper overall. I would like to see more of this paper. I say, it would be a good read for me after a busy day of stictching up rats with girbles and such. |
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Reply by: Dr_Weird at Jan 24, '10 15:07 | |
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Great first paper, Has a lot of potential Just brush up a few things and you'll be in business |
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Reply by: Grizzly at Jan 24, '10 16:26 | |
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