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| DarkFlame : Ashes to a new beginning | Started by: DarkFlame on May 18, '10 02:39 |
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DarkFlame was once a child that only looked on the darker side of life and never expected to prosper in his life. Over and over he told himself "There is nothing in this world that would make me happy" So hard did his parents try to show their son the joys and beautiful things that life had to offer. The birds singing their lovely songs, the way the plants grow and share a stable relationship with the water and the animals that live around, on, or even inside the plant life.
But, still he did not want to open up and experience the life changing perspectives and views of others things. No not even the views of other people incised him, and so because of this his friendship with others were as a shadow giving nothing more or nothing less which was required to be in a status of "liking" the person as a person itself. But, one day someone came into his life changing all of it spinning the very fabric of his being into something people would consider a "human being", puzzled by the fact that this person would go though the trouble of showing him how big the world is and how the world is there not as a planet but, as an entire being of life and energy possible of creating such things that make a beings existence present and even trying to stabilize what was known as a living condition for animal and plant life.
Also, this person showed DarkFlame that people known as human beings can be easily "Corroded and poisoned" with greed and self concern more over the entire well being of others as well, that some people only care about themselves and don't show any compassion or even a second thought of what they have done to others or what they can do to help. So, from that day on DarkFlame was reborn from the ashes of his old "blind" life into this new life that was given to him to see how he could fair in the real world the world of people and the decisions that they make to justify themselves as human beings. |
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*applaudes* encore encore!!! |
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| Reply by: bigdaddy_182 at May 18, '10 03:31 | |
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You have talent, great story can't wait for the next. |
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| Reply by: -Prophet- at May 18, '10 03:50 | |
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Now that is a good way to introduce one's self.
Chuck shakes the hand of DarkFlame
Good work mate. |
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| Reply by: Chuck at May 18, '10 07:56 | |
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very good read |
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| Reply by: Chaos_SPike at May 18, '10 11:05 | |
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XD Thanks everyone!!! I usually don't make stories now but, I used to when I was younger, mostly get inspiration from my life experiences so yes I will be making Ashes to a new beginning 2 you can count on it XD |
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| Reply by: DarkFlame at May 18, '10 13:12 | |
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Great Story man, I see you have Great Talent |
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| Reply by: Legendary_2Cool at May 18, '10 16:40 | |
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Ashes to a new beggining 2 is up and in the streets!! |
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| Reply by: DarkFlame at May 19, '10 16:09 | |
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Ava Marie pushes through the crowd to see the newcomer to the streets. The words make perfect sense to her at a time when little else seems to be understandable. "DarkFlame, I applaud you and your abilities. I look forward to hearing more," She says with respect and sincerity. Then she heads back to the place where she feels the most comfortable. |
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| Reply by: Ava_Marie at May 19, '10 16:49 | |
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Mango walks up to the crowd surround DarkFlame and pushes through so to get to a point where he can hear the story very well. He listens intently trying not to miss anything.
"This is a very good story my friend, just from reading this I will have to go read your next since I see that you have put it in the streets now. Very impressive!" |
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| Reply by: afghanmango at May 19, '10 16:53 | |
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Very nice, don't read much and I'm glad this is one thing I did. |
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| Reply by: FroconyII at May 19, '10 22:59 | |
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Its a nice speech, but it seems a little vague and half baked, like you told the moral to a story without actually giving a story. I don't mean to be rude but lessons are better learned through experience than through hearing stories and how are we supposed to believe someone one day wakes up and sees the light. Its like saying a dog will just randomly lose his color blindness, it would be interesting and meaningful if we knew how and why the dog was able to see colors, but its sketchy and awkward without the details. |
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| Reply by: brustynuts at May 20, '10 14:58 | |
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