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| John meets Anselmo | Started by: John_Updike on Jun 17, '10 13:01 |
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I was nearly back to the hotel when I was suddenly overwhelmed by the heat, and decided to stop and take a short rest. On holiday in LA from Philadelphia, I was not yet accustomed to the humidity, which weighed on my body as if I were constantly adorned in a soaked robe. I sat on a rounded concrete ledge that was about knee height, leaned forward, and lit a cigarette. After a couple drags, I sat back, lightly pushing the back of my head into the wall of the building behind me, splaying my hair outward. I closed my eyes against the sun and enjoyed another puff in the warmth it gave. A voice broke my euphoria, and shocked me into annoyance. |
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lol your name has dike in it. |
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| Reply by: Revan at Jun 17, '10 16:01 | |
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Riveting contribution, Mr. Revan. I appreciate it. |
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| Reply by: John_Updike at Jun 17, '10 16:05 | |
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Nice story. I like that it is proper and something to keep me reading. |
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| Reply by: Lefty_Bonanno at Jun 18, '10 19:38 | |
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Wow. I love your style of writing, it really pulled me in. Your character (John) has a very interesting manner of speak, and I'm sure his relationship with Anselmo is going to be very very amusing. I really look forward to more :)
Also....yeah great job Revan, you're comment sure had some good points. I really liked that simile near the middle and the limerick poem at the end. Really good way to put out your feelings to the world ;) |
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| Reply by: Will at Jun 18, '10 23:58 | |
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Thank you, Will. I've always taken pride in my story-telling. Maybe I'll make a career as a writer or something, someday. Glad that you like my personality, as well. I've always had a knack for the way that I observe the every day world.
The day that I met Anselmo, which I've described, was the first in the course of my rise to crime. I'll be sure to share more about my experiences, as well as our relationship, as I find the time. Thanks again. |
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| Reply by: John_Updike at Jun 19, '10 00:18 | |
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Interesting story indeed Mr.John sir. Your way of telling the story got me interested from start to end. Looking forward to hearing more from you in the future. I wish you all the best sir in your journeys ahead. |
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| Reply by: Felipe at Jun 19, '10 05:29 | |
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